I won a query critique. Which was cool and exciting. I need the input, need to figure out if I'm getting on the right track on explaining what Being Human is about. I am getting there, trust me on that, but right now I'm a bit frustrated. It seems no matter what I say, which angle I approach, people are getting the wrong idea. They are being led in the wrong direction, thinking one part of the story is the whole plot and advising me to focus on that.
Obviously I'm doing something wrong.
Obviously I need to change the way I approach my query. I know what the plot is. Which is Tommy's trying to understand what it means being human even though he isn't. That is the focus of the story, the journey Tommy takes. He grows from being full of apathy for the human world, only caring about surviving to being ready to sacrifice himself for the ones he loves.
Now, how do I do it? The story is cut up into four parts, each one with it's own little plotline that moves the main plot along. It also takes place over three decades and I found that tricky to show. But maybe that's where I'm going wrong. I'm trying to give each minor plot a spot in the query when what I need to do is focus solely on the main plot: Tommy learning to be human. Everything else, names and years passed, does not matter.
Guess this means I'm starting from scratch again. Joy.
PS: For the record I know there is a show on SyFy called Being Human. I know 132,000 is a high word count for a YA novel. I KNOW! Stop reminding me.